My little "Poem"

[ararura]

I don't know if you can call it a poem but I wrote it when I was bored, take a look and comment

I felt so happy
lying in your arms.
It felt like I wasn't lonely
I had someone to hold on
and it was you.
You had my heart
but you decided to crush it.

[Marcdk]

very small poem. hmm in the 5th line, remove "and" it's not needed at all, just a suggestion

[ararura]

Ok marc, thanks for the suggestion I'll see, please give more suggestion if you have. Like adding some things or so